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in a warmed pot
hot water and tea leaves
meet in an intimate embrace
pleased by the tea leaves' attentions
the water becomes a sweet golden nectar
but the water is a cruel lover
and she turns bitter if held too long
so the tea leaves are left behind
tired and used, forgotten
the water has taken what she wants
This really did start as a nice pleasant couple of words about how soothing and relaxing it is to make tea (its preparation a ritual, its consumption a sacrament)...  two verses each structured like a haiku.  Then this happened. 
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Given 2014-08-04
making tea by kilkegard invites you to sip on a metaphor made more powerful by ambiguity: is the voice describing tea or its own lost love? ( Featured by ShadowedAcolyte )
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hopeburnsblue Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2014  Professional Writer
Congrats on the DD!
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kilkegard Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2014
Thank you very much!  :D (Big Grin) 
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Saiyanpelt-and-Co Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Haha.  Water is evil. :)
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kilkegard Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2014
lol,  Thanks!  :) (Smile) 
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:icondamienluciferjudas:
OMG this is amazing, so much meaning in this... P.S I like your picture
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kilkegard Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014
Thank you.  I'm glad you like the poem and the evolution monkey!  =P (Razz) 
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Gah this is relatable to so much more than tea. This is so well-written and beautiful! Stay awesome, sunshine! :hug:
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kilkegard Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014
I'm happy that you liked it!  Thank you.  I'll try for awesome...  though I'll confess that I really do like rainy days sometimes.  :) (Smile)   
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hahha, me too friend, me too. :)
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Herculanum Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014
A poem about tea, I must say, this is so true ! The choices of the words are perfect ! :heart:
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:iconkilkegard:
kilkegard Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014
Thank you.  I'll very glad you liked it.   :) (Smile)   I make tea often so some of the word choices just seemed to flow naturally.
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Herculanum Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2014
A flow of words for a flow of tea ! :rose:
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Kreeling Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014
Nout wrong with that.
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kilkegard Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014
;) (Wink) 
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BlackBowfin Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hey man.  Congrats on the DD.  I thought I'd already faved this poem when you got your DLR- dunno what happened, but it's fixed now.  Good job.  :)
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kilkegard Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014
Thank you very much.  It is one of my favorites and I'm glad other like it as well.  I'm a big fan of tea and I feel particularly close to the subject matter on this one.  :) (Smile)  
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Elizabethyyy Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014
"Then his happened."
Love it. Reality ensued, a tad cynical one, but vat can you do~
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kilkegard Featured By Owner Edited Aug 5, 2014
Its weird but that last line, "but vat can you do", I read in the voice of Lando Mollari from Babylon 5!  I guess if you're not familiar with the show that came out of deep roving right field.  I'm happy you liked the poem.  Thank you!

<Londo Mollari voice> Vir, some hot jala right away! </Londo Mollari voice>
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Chiyosen Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Student General Artist
You should write an entire cookbook like this. :XD:
Naw, seriously. That was pretty. :)
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kilkegard Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014
Well I do like to cook; but I'm not an overly prolific writer so that cook book may be a long time in writing.  Thank you, I'm glad you liked it!  :) (Smile) 
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artbyfieldsofsage Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
My first thought: I should like to have a cup of tea with you:)
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kilkegard Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014
Well, I'll be having a cup of tea this Sunday at 10AM Eastern Daylight Time (that's a part of my normal Sunday routine).  If we can't share a cup of tea, we can have a cup of tea at the same time.  :) (Smile) 
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artbyfieldsofsage Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Cute!  It's a date!
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kilkegard Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014
Thank you.  I love your screen name and your icon and your position on Orca captivity. 
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kilkegard Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014
Thank you very much!  :) (Smile) 
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AgonizingSwordfish Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer

Congratulations on the DD! :hug:
Beautifully written :)

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kilkegard Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014
Thank you!  BTW, you take some wonderful pictures.   
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AgonizingSwordfish Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
You're welcome :aww:
And thank you :hug:
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pearwood Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
An unexpected turn, indeed.  Well done.
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kilkegard Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014
Sometimes the words have their own idea about where the "story" goes.  I'm happy you liked this.  :) (Smile) 
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pearwood Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Likewise with photography.  The image often takes over and leads to unexpected places.
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mruki Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
That took a turn I wasn't expecting. A lovely read!
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kilkegard Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014
Thank you!  I'm glad you enjoyed the poem!  :) (Smile) 
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LeftUnfinished Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Lovely. I want tea just to look at it. :)
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kilkegard Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014
I'll confess that sometimes I'll make tea not because I want a cup, but because enjoy the process of making the tea.  Warm pot, spoon full of tea leaves, boiling water, and wait...  despite the poem it is a soothing ritual.
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NulloAlarumKitty Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
i think i'm going to have a cup of tea...
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kilkegard Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014
Hands Over Cuppa Tea is good!   
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NulloAlarumKitty Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
i know!!! XDonion boy 2 
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XxFlameFrost101xX Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I love tea and I love this too 
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kilkegard Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014
As a fellow tea lover just let me say thank you very much!
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XxFlameFrost101xX Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're very welcome 
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Allysonspanties Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
wow
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kilkegard Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014
Thank you very much!  And welcome to DeviantArt!
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TheWeeLad Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014
well... that turned sideways quickly.
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kilkegard Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014
The original idea was much more sedate.  The turn sideways surprised me a bit when I figured out where the words wanted to go.   :) (Smile)  
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BleedingProphecies Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yes! Finally, my friend! 

I was so excited to see your name here! :D 

Excellent work, good sir! Congratulations! 
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kilkegard Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014
Thank you so much!  I am very glad that you liked this.  :happybounce: 
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BleedingProphecies Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're so welcome! 

And of course I liked it, it's friggin brilliant! 
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